My first England essay in college

I wish I had the Guts…

I wish I had the guts to ask for Catherine’s mobile phone number. I am a shy guy when it comes to girls. Sometimes I literally burst into sweat when I’m near girls. I think it’s a condition which I will refer to as ‘girl-phobia’ which I developed due to terrible experiences with them. It has been like this since a long time ago. I have no confidence in myself because I am afraid of what people, especially the girls, think about me, like how I express myself or how I talk. I don’t know how Catherine will react when I talk to her.

The situation with the girl in mention went like this. It was just another ordinary English lesson in college. My friends and I got into the classroom early, so we sat around and talked among ourselves. In walked Mrs. Chong minutes later, smiling and thinking of how to make the lesson torturous enjoyable and interactive. She proceeded to teach us about some things which I forgotten right away and then she set us on the task of getting into groups of 4 and doing a group assignment. So all of us started looking around for a group. Chee Fei and I saw a group with 2 spaces free. We joined that group and had a nice surprise. I had the luck of being in the same group as Catherine! When I saw her, my heart started beating faster and faster, till it almost popped out. She was the vision of beauty, as beautiful as Aphrodite, the Greek goddess of love herself! My ‘girl-phobia’ kicked into 3^rd gear and I almost collapsed from the over pumping of blood into my veins.

I stayed silent throughout almost the whole discussion, only putting in my two cents worth from time to time. I thought to myself, “I will get her number later”. Unfortunately, my nervousness reached its peak and I choked on words the moment I was going to ask her. At the end of the discussion, I was resigned to my failure and looked away from her. That was one of the worst feelings I ever had, the thought of me being a coward, afraid of pretty girls. So I set myself a mission, to stop being a coward and ask for Catherine’s mobile phone number the next time I see her.

I saw her next at the cafeteria the next day. She was with Minnie, the other member in our group of four. Then my lucky stars shone on me. Another friend of mine, Jon, wanted to say something to Minnie and Cat. I took this chance and sat down along with Jon. The moment of truth had arrived. Slowly, I took out my own phone and asked Catherine, “can…I have you number?” She keyed in her number into my phone and passed the phone back to me. I thought to myself, “Yes! I’ve done it! I’ve kicked away my greatest fear!”

The wonderful feeling of knowing my fear is finally gone was ecstatic. Well, at least it’s gone for the moment. The very next day, it came back. So as they say, old habits die hard.

B++

Teacher’s note - Grammar is OK, style of writing is acceptable
- Unfortunately, I can’t give you an A because the topic and plot of your story has been used before and too often.

My first essay...gets a ... B++... All is dooommeeddd... I can't get A...
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